I would love some constructive criticism...

Cree

So I’m writing just for fun. I haven’t taken any classes or anything but I’m wondering if you guys would read this book or if I’m wasting my time...I know I need to work on grammar and spelling. I’m just asking about the content

His hands wrap around my torso from behind that sends tingles up and down my body to turning me on. His hands trail from just under my ear all the way to my ass, which he squeezes possessing what I already know is his. He starts kissing me on my neck, right in the spot that always makes me quiver and melt into him. He flips me to face him so fast, I’m not sure where I am. I don’t even care. He moves his mouth all over my neck, down my décolletage, and then down to my cleavage slowly and tempting me with every nibble he makes. His hands continue to explore my body like he’s never touched me before, only we both know that’s a lie. He works his way down to my ass again to lift me with ease and places me on the counter. I’m wearing a denim mini skirt, which makes it a little harder to spread my legs until he moves it up around my waist and I wrap my legs around his toned abs and back. My hands are exploring his body now underneath his clothes he still has on for some reason, eager to touch every inch of him even though I already know what exactly I’m going to find. I run my hands all the way down until I feel his bulge in his pants, making me even more turned on to find that I make him as ready as he makes me. He takes that as a green light to find the same spot on me. He stops and looks at me with those emerald green eyes and when he discovers that I’m not wearing anything to protect myself from him underneath my mini skirt, a devilish smile creeps across his face. I know what that means and I surrender to him completely.

“You’re not wearing any underwear,” he moans as he slides finger across my most sensitive area.

“I thought I would surprise you,” I said all out of breath. He lets out a sexy, deep moan in his throat, as he slowly moves one finger and quickly two fingers in and out of me. I let out a gasp, letting him know that he is once again getting to me.

“I approve,” he whispers, “But only for me.” He pulls back his hands from me and replaces his touch with his mouth. Moving hungrily over my clit, stimulating me until I’m on the verge of release. His tongue flicking and his teeth nibbling oh so lightly, until finally I clench deliciously around his tongue. Wracked with tremors all around my body, he quickly moves me into the living room on the couch. He rips off my tiny tank top and I pull his shirt up over his head to reveal the best six pack I have ever seen with a deep v showing the top of what I’m craving. His happy trail is a sight I’m always elated to see. He removes my bra with ease and lays me down on the couch facing down with a pillow under me to prop up my ass. I hear his zipper move down his pants and a condom wrapper ripping so he can sheath his impressive length. I feel his hands around my waist again moving up my back and around my shoulders to grip as I feel him pressing against my all too ready entrance. The tingles start again and I start to shake with pleasure.

“Is this is ok,” he asks.

“Yes. Now, please, have your way with me”

“As you wish.” He moves painfully slow to shift inside of me. His rock hard dick filling me up in the best way possible. Building me back up from my earlier orgasm, the feeling coming back again now at full force. Steadying one hand on my back the other moves to my breast slightly pinching my nipple making them bead and me move faster towards my goal. He picks up his pace and delivers one after another of his incredible thrusts. I could already taste my sweet release as he flips me on my back.

“I want to see you as you come,” he breathes in my ear. His words are almost my undoing until he retracts from me. I sit up to meet him face to face and position myself to my knees. I kiss him slowly and deeply, moving to his neck and down his front, just like he did to me earlier. When I reach his member I pass it, teasing him, knowing he thought he was going deep in my mouth. I move to the inside of his thighs and start to lick and nibble the sensitive flesh, teasing and loving this man until he can barely stand it. I move to cup his balls, playing with them just like I would those medicine balls you move around in your hand to calm down. Strangely he has the same effect on me. I take him all into my mouth tasting myself on him and loving it. Moving on him, up and down, up and down, until he is squirming uncontrollably, ready to bust. I come off of him with a pop and say, “No, I want you to come somewhere else.” He knows exactly what I mean and he moves into action swiftly. He picks me up again, always with such ease, and kisses me deeply until my back hits the wall. He lifts me a little to insert himself inside of me, stretching my inner walls with ecstasy.

“I’m not going to last much longer at this rate,” he grunts.

“Then come for me.” He starts moving faster in me, making me pick up right where I left off. My explosion was right there, I could taste it.

“Oh, god baby come with me,” he gasps.

“I’m so close.” Almost. Almost. There-- I find yet another release as he finds his in perfect balance, but he makes sure that we ride out our high until the very end, me meeting him thrust for thrust until finally we come down. He collapses on top of me breathing rather hard as am I. Relishing in my recent high, he moves us over so that we are spooning on the couch.

“What a way to make breakfast,” I say shyly.

“My favorite way,” he breaths in my ear, taking it in his mouth and lightly biting down.

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