CAN SOMEONE PLEASE BE HONEST WITH ME!!??

I wrote this in thought of falling in love with my husband for the first time, I would love to give this to him but I havent written anything "emotional" in a LONG time.. I just want some thoughts on the poem if it's good or not?? Please be honest, I don't wanna feel like a fool lol.. Thanks! 😊

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MY First Time..

Your fingers touch me ever so lightly..

Goose bumps begin to rise up and down my body..

My knees begin to quiver..

While my mind begins to race..

love is being created..

As we are face to face..

The world seems to stop..

While attached to you within a gaze..

My heart begins to melt..

As you caress my face..

I never felt such a loving touch..

Like an artist to his painting..

Or a Gardener to his garden..

You begin to get closer..

As I become to get weaker..

You quickly hold me up..

As my knees begin to buckle..

A deep look is given..

Then a very, sweet, special kiss...

Nothing can ever be better

Than falling in LOVE..

With YOU..♡