I've been trying to write poetry more often but need peoples opinion on this one. Thoughts?

This is call "Taste Of You"

Your teeth pierce into my soft raw skin. Your tongue grazes the base of my jaw. My hands pressed against the wall, nothing to do but be amused. Sounds filling the room, screams of pleasure and lust, nothing left but dust, dancing in the nothingness of the past before us. Your body close but your thoughts closer. The taste of your words bouncing off the walls make me only crave you more. You'll never understand the need to have you near me and the pain I feel when you're far. You push yourself away, but with every push I only want more. Nothing out of sight. Nothing left in the dark. I only want the taste of you on my tongue