YELS essay

Julianariverafebo
I'm applying for a summer program at UF and I want your guys opinions on the essay. I will gladly take constructive criticism. I'm not amazing at essays so please be nice 😅 
I know this isn't an educational app but I will truly appreciate help. 
This is what the essay has to be about 
This is my essay 
As an eager junior enrolling in gateway highschool I am  taking advantage of all the amazing opportunities I can obtain in the world. I am in numerous clubs, but I am never truly satisfied. I always want to better myself and fill in my time with activities that will help myself and my community. The program will provide me with the essentials I need to help my community. I will truly appreciate spending four weeks at UF expanding my knowledge while helping my community. 
I approximately have three hundred community service hours while only needing fifty to graduate and one hundred for bright futures. You can clearly see that helping my community is more than just a "requirement". I want to volunteer at different settings and do unfamiliar labor  for my world. I am starting off with Florida, but I want to volunteer all around the world. Sustainability is the definition of my life. I can do the exact same thing everyday. I wake up everyday giving my one hundred and ten percent  in everything I do. I am sustainable, but I am also versatile. I will do new tasks and process information constructively and perfectly.  
I do define myself as a leader.. a leader of my life. 
I choose to better myself. I choose to join numerous clubs and stay on the track to graduation and beyond. I also tend to take charge in group projects, but I know when to take constructive criticism. 
My main academic goals is to have ATLEAST a 3.3 unweighted gpa and have multiple college offers. 
I want to purse an occupation in the medical field. There's thousands of jobs in the medical field, but I have chosen to be a fertility specialist and minor in genetics. I will have to merit a bachelors degree, attend medical school for four years, take part in a residency program and lastly acquire  a fellowship. I will spend in the region of thirteen  years trying to obtain my dream job. I hope to be a strong finically stable individual.
Skills can be created or naturally engraved in oneself. A large amount of my skills I've always had. I have exceptional communication skills that can help my peers. I can explain information to them clearly. Another skill I have is I am a team player. I am already positive I can work with my future team and contribute to my teams progression. I am a really well rounded individual. I am in AVID 3, Beta,orchestra,United Nations, best buddies and managed the football team song with three other individuals. I can debate on controversial topics or play Beethoven symphony 5 with my orchestra. 
In final analysis, I, Juliana will be an influential contributor to the YELS program. I'll gain knowledge and experiences through this excellent program. I have past experiences with doing multiple types of community service. I can and will use my past experiences to do outstanding accomplishments within this program.