Is this to much

Phone interview went to shit as I was rambling on. It clearly showed I was not mentally mature as I should be for the job but I really want to work as a consultant

" I would like to thank you again for the interview Jenny, it was quit enjoyable speaking to you. I would also like to take this time to apologize for any irrelevance that I may have spewed. I realized that the questions I had asked did not quit highlight my ambitions to the extent I was hoping to show or my desire to work for your company..." It's incomplete

I know I need to fix it, just a rough draft. I want to possibly try again with an interview would it be wrong to request for a second try