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Can you guys give me feedback on my poem
Calm water
I was in the water
surviving
Living in calm waters
You came and helped me to shore
A small island
beautiful island
At first
We had warmth and love
We had laughter and no problems
We had food and clothes
We had
Oh we had
One day while you were away
I was attacked
I got attacked by the water
The waves
Oh the waves
Came in hot and heavy
I wasn’t ready for it
I didn’t know how to handle it
And I yelled your name
Oh I screamed your name
And to come back to the shore
I saw you controlled the wave
You did that to me
But why ?
Why me ?
Why hurt me when we love ?
Waves came again and again 1-2 times a month for 3 years
I finally got pushed away from the ocean
I’m in the water again
Not the calm waters I knew before
This water is something different
I sit in distress wondering where I went wrong
What did I do wrong
Why am I in pain
Why am I
Why am I
In pain for days
starving for days
Crying for days
They become weeks
I said enough
I can’t any longer
Right before I wiped my tears another huge wave came
But this was something different
Broken pieces of wood was in the water
I learned to cope
I learned to build
I learned to get back
I did
Alone
Once I made it stable enough I got on top
Finally a piece of relaxation
I kept going
Building
making a boat
waters get calm once again
Then you come
again
With a yacht telling me to come on
Passing me the life persevere
I want to grab it but every time I reach you pull it back
You keep throwing it to me and pulling it back
Why
Why me
Again
Finally I grab it but I stop for a minute to think
Do I get off this piece of wood
Back into the calm water
To go with you on this yacht
To go back to that island
Do I need that island to survive ?
Do I need your help?
Do I need this ?
Do I ?
Do I ?
I
Me
Do I need YOU ?!
I let go
you don’t leave
While I make the waters calm once again
While I make my own boat out of this wood
You stay
You want me
But I want me
I deserve my water
I deserve my boat
I deserve happiness
I deserve me
Let's Glow!
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